In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects.

Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.



It is becoming increasingly common for people who travel aboard. As a result, it has been provided many profits for economic in some countries. Although it may have unexpected risks, I believe that the advantages of international tourism are more significant than its drawbacks.
One of the obvious disadvantages is the large global visitor may lead to some considering the environment. There are more transportation and accommodation to supply tourism. Therefore, the air and water can be afflicted by emissions from the plane, car. The natural world may be damaged by some people who lack awareness of environment conservation. Besides, some organization who just prioritize the profit and destroy forests to build a destination that is served to visitors. In addition, the development of traveling may link to security and crime.
On the other hand, international tourism has several points in its favor. Not just the government but people in the country can get the amount of currency. It contributes to economic, and provide jobs for people which can solve employment, and poverty problems. Moreover, it is a great opportunity for a country in terms of cultural spreading. If a country has many visitors from all over the world which mean they desire to know things about people, cuisine, scenery, and tradition of this country. In many countries, tourism also is a way to attract investigation from others country or international organizations.
In conclusion, I think international tourism contribute many advantages. I also believe that the government need to make some legislation for a visitor to restrict problems

It (What do you mean by "it"?) is becoming increasingly common for people who travel aboard. (wrong word)


That is not a good sentence. Your tried to write a cleft sentence, but it is not correct.
Here are some sentences you can use:

Traveling abroad is becoming increasingly common.
Traveling abroad is becoming very popular.
It is becoming increasingly common for people to travel abroad.

As a result, it has been provided (Incorrect use of passive voice) many profits for economic (economic is an adjective. You need a noun after it.) in some countries.


As a result, the extra income generated by tourism has benefited the country's economy. 

Although it may have there may be unexpected risks, I believe that the advantages of international tourism are more significant than its drawbacks.


One of the obvious disadvantages is the large global visitor (a very tall and fat person?) may lead to some considering the environment. (Some people think about the environment?) There are more transportation and accommodation to supply tourism. Therefore, the air and water can be afflicted (wrong word) by emissions from the plane, car. (which plane and which car?) The natural world may be damaged by some people who lack awareness of environment conservation. Besides, some organization who just prioritize the profit and destroy forests to build a destination that is served (Incorrect use of passive voice) to visitors. In addition, the development of traveling may link to security and crime.


Model paragraph:

One of the obvious disadvantages is that the large numbers of foreign visitors may harm the environment. These travelers will require local transportation and places to stay. The emissions from this transportation (planes, buses, and cars) can affect the air quality.  And, some of these visitors may not be aware of how their activities can damage sensitive ecosystems.  Besides, some local organizations, motivated by profits, will cut down trees to build luxurious resorts. And the tourists, who carry money with them, may attract criminal activity so the overall security in the country will be diminished. 

On the other hand, international tourism has several points in its favor. Not just the government but people in the country can get the amount of currency. (??) It contributes to economic, and provide jobs for people which can solve employment, and poverty problems. Moreover, it is a great opportunity for a country in terms of cultural spreading. If a country has many visitors from all over the world which mean they desire to know things about people, cuisine, scenery, and tradition of this country. In many countries, tourism also is a way to attract investigation from others country or international organizations. 


In conclusion, I think international tourism contribute many advantages. I also believe that the government need to make some legislation for a visitor to restrict problems