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question: a lot of people are trying to look youger, what are the reasons, is it a positive or negative development?


In any historical periods of time, beauty has been being an indispensable aspect of human life all over the world, regardless of any religions, and trying to look younger seems to be not an unprecedented trend for a lot of people. Although there are some limitations of this trend, a myriad of reasons and benefits can be easily mentioned as a cause and results of it.

A lot of reasons making younger appearance becomes a necessary factor. By getting younger, especially for woman, they will be more attractive which is help them gain a lot of attention and support. For example,we all know a fact that if a good-looking preson appears at a party, people around tend to pay attention on her and try to make a conversation. In addition, A bright external show brings not only attention but also confidence taking a big step for them to their success. Some people often hesitates and feels shy when they are talking in front of crowd, due to worrying about their appearance, but this fear will be blown away if they know that they are in a good situations thanks to their trying.

with a youger - looking appearance, people easily perceive a lot of positive changes in their life. First, by acquiring more beauty and confidence, a number of people can get bigger happiness in their house with their partner, which is a necessity for them. Feeling upset about the partner’s appearance is a main reason ,besides, lacking of comprehension between husband and wife, that makes their relationship becomes worst, but this situation will be limited with trying to look younger. As we discuss before, if a person looks younger, it will bring not only happiness but also success and fame which they could use to do some grateful actions. Emma Watson, for instance, being a prominent actress with her bright beauty and intelligence, is currently a goodwill ambassador for United Nations, undoubtedly draw a great deal of attention and promoting gender equality.

In conclusion, trying to look younger seems to bring a myriad of positive benefits than the negative one, we should encourage this trend and it cannot be taken lightly.

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Phan Nguyen Dai Nghiaquestion: a lot of people are trying to look youger, what are the reasons, is it a positive or negative development?

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In any historical periods (wrong form - singular) of time, beauty has been being (wrong verb form) an indispensable aspect of human life all over the world, regardless of any religions, (What role does religion play? Is it relevant to the topic?) and trying to look younger seems to be not an unprecedented trend (wrong word) for a lot of people. Although there are some limitations of this trend, (wrong word) a myriad (wrong word) of reasons and benefits can be easily mentioned as a cause and results of it. (This does not make much sense.)

A lot of reasons for a making younger appearance becomes a necessary factor. (wrong expression) By getting (Nobody can reverse time and get younger. Time only goes in one direction.) younger, especially for woman, (missing article) they will be more attractive which is help (wrong verb form) them gain a lot of attention and support. For example,we all know a fact that if a good-looking preson appears at a party, people around tend to pay attention to on her and try to make a conversation. In addition, A bright external show (wrong expression) brings not only attention but also confidence taking a big step (ungrammatical) for them to their success. Some people often hesitates (wrong verb form) and feels (wrong verb form) shy when they are talking in front of crowd, due to worrying about their appearance, but this fear will be blown away if they know that they are in a good situations (wrong form) thanks to their trying.(I don't understand this part.)

with a youger - looking appearance, people easily perceive a lot of positive changes in their life. First, by acquiring more beauty and confidence, a number of people can get bigger (wrong word) happiness in their house with their partner, which is a necessity for them. Feeling upset about the partner’s appearance is a main reason ,besides, lacking of comprehension (wrong expression) between husband and wife, that makes their relationship becomes (wrong verb form) worst, (wrong form) but this situation will be limited with trying to look younger. (I don't understand this part.) As we discuss before, if a person looks younger, it will bring not only happiness but also success and fame which they could use to do some grateful actions. (wrong expression.) Emma Watson, for instance, being a prominent actress with her bright beauty and intelligence, is currently a goodwill ambassador for the United Nations, undoubtedly draw (ungrammatical, wrong verb form) a great deal of attention and promoting (ungrammatical, wrong verb form) gender equality.

In conclusion, trying to look younger seems to bring a myriad (wrong word) of positive benefits than the negative one, we should encourage this trend (wrong word) and it cannot be taken lightly.


Vocabulary:

myriad - expresses a number that is so large that it is impossible to count. Here is an example:

A myriad of bluebonnets cover the landscape in the hills of Texas in April.