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Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Answer

Nowadays, environmental issues are becoming increasingly common and attract more public attention. People have had different views in terms of which problem is the most fundamental to tackle. While some people think that is the recent extinction of several plants and animals, others argue that there are more serious problems. Although I have to admit that we should protect our flora and fauna, we also should cope with other equally important issues.

One of the most urgent problems is the extinction of many species for the reason that any living organism on earth, whether plant or animal, is worth to be preserved because of its important role in maintaining the ecological balance in which each species is a part of the food chain. Therefore, if one of them dies out, the other elements on the chain will be impacted and there would be detrimental effects on the human’s food-producing industry. For example, the extinction of algae would lead to a reduction in the amount of fish which eat that plant. As a result, humans would have less fish to consume.

On the other hand, I emphasize that we should fight against climate change and slow down global warming process. It is us who have to be responsible for these problems because the greenhouse gas emission released from our factory production or private vehicles which keeps UV radiation and increases the global temperature. In turn, these problems alter precipitation, trigger abnormal droughts and devastating floods which pose a risk to the world’s agriculture and food security. Furthermore, these problems also contribute to the death toll and provoke the loss of homes in many places around the world.

In conclusion, both preserving species in our ecosystem and addressing climate change and global warming play important roles in guaranteeing human well-being and saving our planet.


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Nowadays, environmental issues are becoming increasingly common and attract more public attention. People have had different views in terms of which problem is the most critical. fundamental to tackle. While some people think that it is the recent increasing extinction of several plants and animals, others argue that there are more serious problems. Although I have to admit that we should protect our flora and fauna, we also [ 1] should cope with need to tackle other equally important issues.

One of the most urgent environmental problems nowadays is the extinction of many species. for the reason that Experts and ordinary people alike agree that any living organism on earth, whether plant or animal, is worthy of conservation to be preserved because of its important role in maintaining the ecological balance in which each species is a part of the food chain and the broader natural ecosystem. Therefore, if one of them species dies out, the others higher up elements on the food chain will be impacted. and there would be That can even have grave consequences for our own food security. detrimental effects on the human’s food-producing industry. For example, the extinction of marine algae would lead to a reduction in the amount stocks of fish species which eat that plant. As a result, humans would have less fewer [ 2] fish to consume.

On the other hand, I [ 3] emphasize also strongly believe that we should fight against climate change and slow down the global warming process. It is us who We have to be responsible take responsibility for these problems because the greenhouse gas emissions released from our factories y production or private vehicles which keeps UV radiation trap solar heat and increase the global temperature. In turn, these problems alter precipitation, [ 4] and trigger abnormal extreme droughts and devastating floods which pose a risk to the world’s agriculture and food security. Furthermore, these problems natural disasters also contribute directly and indirectly lead to the death of thousands of people toll and provoke the loss of homes in many places around the world.

In conclusion, both preserving species in our ecosystem and addressing climate change and global warming play important roles in guaranteeing human the well-being of people and saving our planet.

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[ 1]: “cope” talks about the ability to tolerate or adapt to a difficult situation.

[ 2]: We use “many” with “fish” because we can count them. Cf “many deer”, “many sheep”.

[ 3]: That’s not how “emphasize” is used.

[4 ]: We use “and” at the end of a list, even if it just has two items.

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