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WRITING TASK 2:

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


MY WRITING:

It is argued that governments’ revenue should be allocated for railway system rather than street network. I partly agree with this argument as I suppose that both of them are compatible with each other and need investing fairly.

On one hand, the emergence of logistics and supply chain management companies along with online trading has led to an increase in using both railways and roads. In many cases, goods cannot be transported on roads but railways are acceptable and vice versa. For example, I do need to send something from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City, I am certain to choose railways because they are suitable for this long distance and take me less fee than using roads. However, railways are not always perfect for transporting. Supposing that I have an order in the range of under ten kilometers from my house, it is not necessary for me to use railways. This means these two systems equally play an important part in daily life.

On the other hand, the transport system of a nation reflects its level of growth. As you can see, no developed countries in the world have a poor set of transport facilities. Take China, the USA as examples, they are famous for many modern constructions of roads and railways. Therefore, if a nation would like to show off its economy, it often starts investing in these transport systems simultaneously without taking priority over one category.

In conclusion, expenditures on railways and roads should be divided equally to ensure the quality of transport service and embellish the image of its owner country.

(265 words)

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It is argued that governments’ revenue should be allocated for railway system (wrong form) rather than streets and roads. network. I partly agree with this argument as I suppose that both of them are compatible with each other and need equal investments. investing fairly.

On one hand, the emergence of logistics and supply chain management companies along with online trading (How has online trading - which uses the internet - involved railways? That makes no sense.) has led to an increase in using both railways and roads. In many cases, goods cannot be transported on roads but railways are acceptable and vice versa. For example, if I do need to send something from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City, I am certain to choose railways because they are suitable for this long distance and take me less fee (poor English) than using roads. However, railways are not always perfect for transporting packages. Supposing that I have an order in the range of under ten kilometers from my house, it is not necessary for me to use the railways. This means these two systems equally play an important part in daily life. (Don't commuters and students use the roads to get to work and school?)

On the other hand, the transport system of a nation reflects its level of growth. As you can see, no developed countries in the world have a poor set of transport facilities. Take China, the USA (missing conjunction - ungrammatical) as examples, they are famous for many modern constructions of roads and railways. Therefore, if a nation would like to show off its economy, it often starts investing in these transport systems simultaneously without taking priority over one category.

In conclusion, expenditures on railways and roads should be divided equally to ensure the quality of transport service and embellish the image of its owner country.

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WRITING TASK 2:

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


MY WRITING:

It is argued that governments’ revenue should be allocated for railway system rather than street network. I partly agree with this argument as I suppose that both of them are compatible with each other and need investing fairly.

On one hand, the emergence of logistics and supply chain management companies along with online trading has led to an increase in using both railways and roads. In many cases, goods cannot be transported on roads but railways are acceptable and vice versa. For example, I do need to send something from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City, I am certain to choose railways because they are suitable for this long distance and take me less fee than using roads. However, railways are not always perfect for transporting. Supposing that I have an order in the range of under ten kilometers from my house, it is not necessary for me to use railways. This means these two systems equally play an important part in daily life.

On the other hand, the transport system of a nation reflects its level of growth. As you can see, no developed countries in the world have a poor set of transport facilities. Take China, the USA as examples, they are famous for many modern constructions of roads and railways. Therefore, if a nation would like to show off its economy, it often starts investing in these transport systems simultaneously without taking priority over one category.

In conclusion, expenditures on railways and roads should be divided equally to ensure the quality of transport service and embellish the image of its owner country.

(265 words)

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Thank you very much indeed!

If it hadn't been for your comments, I would have made more silly mistakes. I realize that my examples are not comprehensive enough.

Would you mind if correcting in the range of under ten kilometers for me? I haven't come up with any ideas about paraphrasing this.

The entire sentence does not make much sense.

1. You are the customer:

Suppose that I have ordered an item from a supplier whose warehouse is less than ten kilometers from my house. They will deliver it by truck, not by rail.

2. You are the business sales agent:

If a customer orders an item from us, and they live less than ten kilometers from our warehouse, we will deliver it by truck, not by rail.

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