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That the numbers of unnecessary deaths tend to rise in the underdeveloped nations is attributed to the high cost of pills from pharmaceutical companies. However, I believe that drug manufacturers do not need to decrease the prices of their products as well as do not deserve to be criticized.

For a variety of reasons, it would be detrimental to drug producers if they had to cut down on prices. It takes scientists a lot of time and money to research new drugs. Despite finishing the process of researching, scientists have to make ends meet with resources of drug ingredients. Supposing that pharmaceutical groups are obliged to release cheap products, they are likely to reduce drug ingredients. This helps them adapt to obstacles in the production process. In contrast, this leads to the low quality of medication. Therefore, fatalities can not be prevented completely just by forcing medicine companies to supply their products with low prices.

From my perspective, governments should participate in saving poor people from healable ailments. Firstly, they need to encourage poor citizens to apply for health insurance. Therefore, their medical fees would be reduced. Secondly, governments ought to impose low taxes on drugs. Tax is a reason which results in the high price of medication. Finally, undeveloped countries can produce drugs on their own by buying a franchise from reliable companies or sending brilliant students to developed countries, boosting drug industries with that group of students.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that drug producers are not responsible for the poor's tragedy and governments' efforts are indispensable.


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That the numbers of unnecessary deaths tend to rise in the underdeveloped nations is attributed to the high cost of pills from pharmaceutical companies. (That is not a good paraphrase. The deaths are not increasing. Also, using a content clause is somewhat awkward.) The high number of needless deaths in the developing countries is attributable to the cost of medicines. Persons earning a only few dollars a day cannot possibly afford a life-saving daily pill or injection costing $1 or less. However, I believe that drug manufacturers do not need to decrease the prices of their products as well as and they do not deserve to be criticized.

For a variety of reasons, it would be detrimental to drug producers if they had to cut down on their prices. It takes scientists a lot of time and money to research new drugs. Despite finishing the process of researching, scientists have to make ends meet (wrong usage) with resources of drug ingredients. Supposing that pharmaceutical groups are obliged to release cheap products, they are likely to reduce drug ingredients. (That makes no sense.) This helps them adapt to obstacles in the production process. (This is off-topic. The topic is not about changing the production process or the medication. It is only about providing poor countries with readily available medicines that save lives. Examples are antimalarials and antibiotics. These drugs have been around for a very long time.) In contrast, this leads to the low quality of medication. Therefore, fatalities can not be prevented completely just by forcing medicine (wrong word) companies to supply their products with low prices.

From my perspective, governments should participate in saving poor people from with treatable conditions. healable ailments. Firstly, First, they need to encourage poor citizens to apply for health insurance. Therefore, their medical fees would be reduced. Secondly, Second, governments ought to impose low taxes on drugs. Tax is a reason which results in the high price of medication. Finally, undeveloped countries can produce drugs on their own by buying a franchise from reliable companies or sending brilliant students to developed countries, boosting drug industries with that group of students.

(That dis not good English)

In conclusion, I strongly agree that drug producers are not responsible for the poor's tragedy of impoverished people in poor countries and governments' efforts are indispensable.

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I apologize for not attaching the instruction of this task. I will leave it here:

WRITING TASK 2: Many people in the undeveloped world die from diseases that are curable because they can't afford the medication to treat themselves. Do you believe that drug companies in the developed world should be obliged to make their products available at reduced prices in these undeveloped countries so that people do not need to die unnecessarily.(at least 250 words)

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