Topic 1: As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Every company have always strived to make a profit through its development, yet it is increasingly believed that social obligations are also an important part of company consideration. I completely agree with the idea that businesses should do more for society rather than solely focus on profits.


On the one hand, businesses must concentrate on making profits in order to ensure their existence. It seems logical that high profits are a must enabling companies to cover their expenses, such as employees' wages, payments for liabilities and facilities. On top of these costs, there is a need for continuous investments in company operations which comes from inside and outside of companies. It is highly significant in case the competitions keep strong growth and expansion throughout the year. With a high profit, businesses will get a higher chance to call for external investments. What’s more, it should be noted that if companies are not in good financial health, they can’t have enough resources to do social obligations. Therefore, having financial health is the first step if they want to think about social responsibilities.


On the other hand, I suppose that companies need to pay more attention to social obligations instead of solely maximizing profits. The fundamental one they can do is to maintain or increase the product quality. There are many cases that companies deliberately ignore the standard process with an aim of reducing cost, but it is detrimental to consumers’ health in the long term. Therefore, it requires strict control and consumer-centric direction to make social health ensure. In addition, companies also have to care about employees’ working environment and compensation. For instance, companies should listen to staff feedback regularly, and give the proper wage to cover their expenses. Finally, I like the idea that businesses give a proportion of their profit to social activities such as facilities buildings, educational scholarships and medical support. It is highly recommended in developing countries to fill gradually the gap between poor and rich people.


In conclusion, I strongly believe that besides considering making profits as a key for company development, companies have to place more and more importance on social obligations as well.

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On the one hand, businesses must concentrate on making profits generate revenue in order to ensure their survival. existence. It seems logical that high profits are a must enabling companies That enables them to cover their expenses, such as employees' wages, payments for liabilities, and rent. facilities. On top of these costs, Additionally, there is usually a need for continuous investments in order to remain competitive. [ 3] company operations which comes from inside and outside of companies. It is highly significant in case the competitions keep strong growth and expansion throughout the year. With a high profit, businesses will get a higher chance to call for external investments. What’s more, Furthermore, it should be noted that if companies are not in good financial health, they [ 4] can’t have enough resources to do would not be in a position to meet their social obligations. Therefore, it is reasonable to assert that earning money is a priority for a business. having financial health is the first step if they want to think about social responsibilities.

On the other hand, I suppose that companies businesses also need to pay more attention to their social obligations. instead of solely maximizing profits. [ 5]

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[ 1]: “company” is not wrong, but note that not all companies are there to make money. Some are owned by the state.

[ 2]: If you “completely” agree, then your first body paragraph becomes off topic! Be mindful of how the position you take in the introduction matches with what you say in your body paragraphs.

[ 3]: Avoid repetition, waffle, and unnecessarily long/complicated sentences. Those only frustrate the examiner. Write concise sentences and present clever (convincing) ideas and examples, instead.

[ 4]: Do not use abbreviated forms in formal writing.

[ 5]: Product quality is regarded as a commercial (not social) matter. If the quality is poor, sales drop! There are other points which you need to discuss. Take a look at the following website to get some ideas.

.online.vu.edu.au/blog/what-is-corporate-social-responsibility

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I would appreciate your thorough feedback, but I wonder a lot about the ideas I develop from my thesis statement "completely agree", is it a right way for IETLS writing? I learn the structure from a sample from Simon (former IETLS examiner), so I am kinda confused.

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I [ “would” suggests a future/theoretical situation] would (do) appreciate your thorough feedback, but I wonder a lot about the ideas I develop from my thesis statement "completely agree". Is it a right way for okay in IETLS writing? I learned the structure from a sample from Simon (former IETLS examiner), so I am kinda kind of confused.

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It is perfectly okay to use “completely agree” or “completely disagree”. However, if you do that, then you should not present the other side of the argument! If you want to write a “on the one hand, … on the other hand” essay, then it is best to avoid absolute positions.

I have revised it. Hope you can check it for me.



Every commercial enterprise exists to make a profit through its activities, yet it is increasingly acknowledged that social obligations are also an important part in a company’s consideration. [1] I agree with the idea that besides focusing on profits, businesses should do their part for society.


On the one hand, businesses must generate revenue in order to ensure their survival. That enables them to cover expenses, such as wages, payments for liabilities, and rent. Additionally, there is usually a need for investments in order to remain competitive. Furthermore, it should be noted that if companies are not in good financial health, they would not be in a position to meet their social obligations. Therefore, it is reasonable to assert that earning money is a priority for a business.


On the other hand, businesses also need to pay attention to their social obligations. Firstly, companies need to follow regulations about environmental standards that ensure a healthy life for residents in the vicinity. It is highly significant as more businesses make frauds to release directly waste to the environment with an aim of reducing production costs. Secondly, companies also have to care about employees’ working environment and compensation. For instance, companies may listen to staff feedback regularly, and give the proper wage to cover their expenses. Finally, I like the idea that businesses give a proportion of their profit to social activities. It is a racial action to sponsor facilities buildings, educational scholarships and medical support in remote areas.


In conclusion, I believe that besides considering making profits as a part of company directions, companies also have to place importance on social obligations.

Every commercial enterprise exists to make a profit through its activities, yet it is increasingly acknowledged that social obligations are also an important part in a company’s consideration. I agree with the idea that besides focusing on profits, businesses should do their part for society.

On the one hand, businesses must generate revenue in order to ensure their survival. That enables them to cover expenses, such as wages, payments for liabilities, and rent. Additionally, there is usually a need for investments in order to remain competitive. Furthermore, it should be noted that if companies are not in good financial health, they would not be in a position to meet their social obligations. Therefore, it is reasonable to assert that earning money is a priority for a business.

On the other hand, businesses also need to pay attention to their social obligations. Firstly, companies need to follow regulations about minimize their environmental footprint. standards that ensure a healthy life for residents in the vicinity. It is highly significant as more Unfortunately, many businesses make frauds to release directly untreated waste directly to the environment. with an aim of reducing They do this out of ignorance, impunity, or simply to reduce production costs. Secondly, companies also have to care about employees’ ensure a healthy working environment for their employees. and compensation. For instance, companies may should listen to staff feedback regularly, and give staff a safe and healthy place to do their work. the proper wage to cover their expenses. Finally, I like the idea that businesses can give a proportion of their profit to community projects, and social activities. It is a racial action to sponsor local sports teams, facilities buildings, educational scholarships, and to provide medical support aid in remote areas.

In conclusion, I believe that besides considering while making profits as a part of is important for a companys survival, directions, companies also have to place importance on social obligations such as those related to the environment or to the local community should not be ignored.

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