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Some people use the Internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples from your experience.


Thanks to the Internet, users are able to seek solutions to their health issues. Some people think that it is a positive development while others disagree. This essay will discuss the controversies over this topic and present my viewpoint.


From one side, the Internet aids us to address our health problems for the following reasons. Firstly, people can get a huge amount of information gained from it to improve their health. When someone catches a cold, instead of making a doctor appointment, she can access information from the Internet and find a variety of results ranging from simple flu to the more serious. As a result, her cold could be cured when following its instruction. Secondly, everyone could receive quick answers to their symptoms via websites about health care. It seems convenient for everyone to ask some questions about their health condition via a chat box on each hospital’s websites or websites about health care. Thence, they will decide that whether they can treat it by themselves or not.


On the other hand, applying the information obtained form it could bring people to side effects due to these reasons. One major concern is about the quality of the information on the web. Since there is too much information available, patients also need a medical help from physicians acting as curators of that information to assist them sort out what is helpful and what is not. Then, they can make use of precise information to treat their illness. Moreover, this way is only appropriate for healing simple illness. With serious diseases, such as cancer or cardiovascular diseases, being diagnosed the health condition by the doctor to seek proper treatment is vital. Even though some information on the Internet is valuable, doctors still play an important role in helping someone recover from their illnesses.


In short, the Internet aids people to find out more solutions to their illnesses, but they should analyze the information before practicing. It is necessary to visit a doctor with serious diseases.

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Thanks to the Internet, users are able to seek solutions to their health issues. Some people think that it is a positive development while others disagree. This essay will discuss the controversies over this topic and present my viewpoint.

(That is an unacceptable thesis statement. It will lower your score. A thesis statement must state the theme or main point of your essay. In an argumentative essay, you must state your opinion in the opening paragraph. That will be your thesis statement. )

From one side, the Internet aids us to address (wrong form) our health problems for the following reasons. Firstly, First, (A series is introduced by: first, second, third, fourth, fifth and sixth. It is very rare that you will require higher numbers.) people can get a huge (this word is too informal for academic essays.) amount of information gained from it (??) to improve their health. When someone catches a cold, instead of making a doctor (wrong form) appointment, she (wrong pronoun) can access information from the Internet and find a variety of results ranging from simple flu to the more serious (missing word. What is more serious than the flu? By the way, some virulent strains of flu are fatal.) As a result, her (wrong pronoun) cold could be cured when (wrong usage) following its instruction. (wrong form) Secondly, Second, everyone (wrong pronoun) could receive quick answers to their symptoms via websites about health care. It seems convenient for everyone to ask some questions about their health condition via a chat box on each hospital’s (wrong form) websites or websites about health care. Thence, (wrong word ) they will decide that (wrong usage) whether they can treat it by themselves or not.


On the other hand, applying the information obtained form it could bring people to side effects (wrong usage) due to these reasons. One major concern is about the quality of the information on the web. Since there is too much information available, patients also need a medical help from physicians acting as curators of that information to assist them sort out what is helpful and what is not. Then, they can make use of precise information to treat their illness. Moreover, this way is only appropriate for healing simple illness. (wrong form) With serious diseases, such as cancer or cardiovascular diseases, being diagnosed the health condition (wrong usage) by the doctor to seek proper treatment is vital. Even though some information on the Internet is valuable, doctors still play an important role in helping someone recover from their illnesses.


In short, the Internet aids people to find out more solutions to their illnesses, but they should analyze the information before practicing. (wrong usage) It is necessary to visit a doctor with serious diseases. (Why should you visit a sick doctor?)


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Dear Ms. AlpheccaStars,

Thank you very much for your help.

Can I rewrite my thesis statement like this:" In my opinion, individuals can improve their simple health issues thanks to the Internet, but visiting a doctor still a better choice in seeking for a cure for dangerous diseases.

Can I rewrite these errors like this:

+ When someone catches a cold, instead of making a doctor's appointment, he or she can access information from the Internet ...

+ As a result, his or her cold could be cured if this person follows its instructions.

+It seems convenient for patients to ask some questions about their health condition via a chat box on hospitals' websites

+ Then, they will decide whether they can treat it by themselves or not.

+ On the other hand, applying the information obtained form the Internet could cause considerable concerns.

+ but they should analyze the information before applying it into their real life. It is necessary to visit a doctor if they have symptoms of serious diseases.


Thank you from the bottom of my heart for everything.

Y TCan I rewrite my thesis statement like this:" In my opinion, individuals can improve their simple health issues thanks to the Internet, but visiting a doctor still a better choice in seeking for a cure for dangerous diseases.

In my opinion, individuals can resolve their simple health issues thanks to the Internet, but visiting a doctor still a better choice in seeking for a cure for a serious condition. dangerous diseases.

Y T When someone catches a cold, instead of making a doctor's appointment, he or she can access information from the Internet ...

When someone catches a cold, instead of making a doctor'a appointment, they can access information on the Internet and find a variety of remedies to treat the symptoms, ranging from a mild cough to the more serious hacking cough with a high fever.

Y T As a result, his or her cold could be cured if this person follows its instructions.

As a result, their cold could be cured if they follow the instructions.

Y T+It seems convenient for patients to ask some questions about their health condition via a chat box on hospitals' websites

People who are ill may find it convenient to ask some questions about their health condition on a chat box on hospitals' websites.

Y T Then, they will decide whether they can treat it by themselves or not.

With the assistance of a health professional, they can determine whether they can treat it by themselves or not.

Y T+ On the other hand, applying the information obtained form the Internet could cause considerable concerns.

On the other hand, using treatments obtained from the Internet could make their condition considerably worse.

Y T+ but they should analyze the information before applying it into their real life. It is necessary to visit a doctor if they have symptoms of serious diseases.

In short, the Internet aids people in diagnosing and finding solutions to their illnesses, but they should carefully consider their condition. If home remedies do not result in improvement after a few days or if the symptoms indicate a more serious disease, it is necessary to visit a doctor.

Many thanks for your detailed corrections.

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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent years, there is an increasing number of people who choose to interact with others by social networking sites instead of face to face. I believe that this trend has both benefits and drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are two main benefits when people choose to socialize online instead of face to face interaction. The first benefit is that this provides people with many chances to widen their friend circle. This means that people are more likely to make friends all over the world by using social websites such as Facebook or Instagram, which makes the world like a small village. The second benefit is that this interaction helps people broaden their horizons about different cultures and traditions. This means that people have many chances to explore different parts of the world by interacting with the local people through social media, which they hardly ever can experience in physical interaction.

On the other hand, the trend of using online interaction also brings a variety of drawbacks for users. Firstly, sitting in front of a computer for a long time can adversely impact people physical’s health ranging from eye strain or short – sightedness to other potential chronic diseases. This is because people tend to devote a large amount of time to talk with their friends instead of doing exercise, leading to a sedentary lifestyle. Secondly, this trend has a detrimental effect on people’s mental health. If people addict to online networks, they tend to isolate themselves with their real friends and family members. Consequently, they are more likely vulnerable to suffer from psychological disorders or autism than those who often contact with others through physical interaction.

In conclusion, the trend of using online interaction to keep in touch with others brings both beneficial and detrimental effects.

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