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The first picture illustrates the park in its opening in 1920 and the second one describes the public park after the development these days.

Overall, it is clear that Grange Park experienced several changes in terms of facilities and infrastructure. Besides, the plans were the emergence of water features and the disappearance of the fountain.

In 1920, the park was built two entrances in which are located in Arnold and Eldon Street near the stages for musicians. In the middle of the picture, the fountain was constructed. There were lots of seats and a rose garden around the surrounding. Pond for water plants was erected in the Northeast.

In recent years, the fountain is demolished to the replacement of the rose garden together with four seats on both four sides. Amphitheatre for concerts appears to replace the stage for musicians. There is the appearance of a cafe in the north. Seats in the west are destroyed to make the pave for the entrance underground car park. In addition, a pond for water plants and a glasshouse are changed by the water feature for entertainment purposes.

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The first picture illustrates the park in its opening in 1920 and the second one describes the public park after the development these days.

Overall, it is clear that Grange Park experienced several changes in terms of facilities and infrastructure. Besides, the plans were the emergence of water features and the disappearance of the fountain.

In 1920, the park was built two entrances in which are located in Arnold and Eldon Street near the stages for musicians. In the middle of the picture, the fountain was constructed. There were lots of seats and a rose garden around the surrounding. Pond for water plants was erected in the Northeast.

In recent years, the fountain is demolished to the replacement of the rose garden together with four seats on both four sides. Amphitheatre for concerts appears to replace the stage for musicians. There is the appearance of a cafe in the north. Seats in the west are destroyed to make the pave for the entrance underground car park. In addition, a pond for water plants and a glasshouse are changed by the water feature for entertainment purposes.

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The first picture illustrates the park in its opening in 1920 and the second one describes the public park after the development these days.

(That is too repetitive and awkward. (24 words)

The two maps compare Grange Park at its opening in 1920 to the present day.

That is not only shorter, 15 words but there is more information. )


Overall, it is clear that (Read my advice) Grange Park experienced (wrong word. Read my advice) several changes in terms of facilities and infrastructure. Besides, the plans were the emergence (wrong word. ) of water features and the disappearance (wrong word. Things just do not appear and disappear like magic.) of the fountain.

In 1920, the park was built two entrances (ungrammatical)) in which are located in (ungrammatical) Arnold and Eldon Street near the stages for musicians. In the middle of the picture, the fountain was constructed. There were lots of seats and a rose garden around the surrounding. (wrong expression) A pond for water plants was erected (wrong word - erect means to build something that is high off the ground.) in the northeast.

In recent years, the fountain is (wrong tense) demolished to the replacement of the rose garden (awkward, unnatural) together with four seats on both (Both means two. Two four sides does not make sense.) four sides. An amphitheatre for concerts appears to (wrong expression. You are looking at something that is factual. Do not use words that express uncertainty or guesses.) ) replace the stage for musicians. There is the appearance (wrong word. Things just do not appear and disappear like magic.) of a cafe in the north. Seats in the west are destroyed to make the pave (wrong word.) for the entrance underground car park. (ungrammatical) In addition, a pond for water plants and a glasshouse are changed by (wrong word.) the water feature for entertainment purposes. (Do not write opinions, deductions, inferences or conclusions in Task 1)

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The two maps depict Grange Park as it was when it opened in 1920 compared to the present day. This public park is bounded on the north by Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street on the south.

Overall, in 1920, the park was dominated by garden areas, with three rose gardens, a water lily pond and a greenhouse. A bandstand and a fountain were central features of the park, and all the seating areas were along the streets. Since then a play area, café, water feature and an amphitheatre have been built.

In detail, Grange Park originally had no parking facilities. Underground parking is now available with an entrance on the south east side. The fountain in the center of the park has been replaced by a square rose garden with benches on all four sides. On the west side, concerts can be performed in a large amphitheater with a seating area. That replaced a bandstand which had no seating. The only things remaining today are the two entrances and the rose garden in the northwest corner.