It is more important for school children to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Knowledge of local history is of vital importance to school kids compared to that of world history. I somewhat agree with this opinion because local history allows them to develop a deeper understanding of their surroundings; however, due to the fast pace of globalization, world history also plays an important role in helping students become well-rounded global citizens.

The main reason why I think local history should be taken seriously is because it enables children to be grateful for what they have now. To be able to go to school and enjoy a peaceful life, both their country and their local area must have been through many ups and downs with a great number of sacrifices. By learning local history, they also learn to appreciate what they have and make an effort to preserve and develop it. Besides, children can also introduce the beauty of their local history to their friends if they have studied it.

On the other hand, globalization has taken place at a faster pace than ever, making it important to expand knowledge about world history. Not only does it help children to know what other countries have been through, but it also provides useful lessons about what children, the future of every country, should do to develop their nation. Learning world history allows students to make a comparison and understand why the USA, for example, has become one of the wealthiest and abundant countries like they are now and the reason behind the rapid and unbelievable development of Singapore. By learning these lessons, it is more likely that children will grow up with valuable and applicable lessons to bring their country to the top.

In conclusion, I somewhat believe that it is essential for young learners to grasp local history, but world history is also something they have to discover. This is because, without world history, they are taken away the opportunity to learn from past mistakes that other countries used to make or innovative strategies to turn underdeveloped countries into a developed one. Given this situation, governments and ministry of education in every country have to take steps to ensure school children can absorb the knowledge of both local and world history.

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https://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayAgreeDisagreeYoungEnjoyLife-Older/bjnlwx/post.htm

https://www.englishforums.com/English/CanAnyoneCheckEssay/bwpzmg/post.htm

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