Hi everybody, today I write an essay about taking a gap year. Hope to receive your support.
Many thanks to you all ^^
Task 2:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
After finishing their study at high school, it would be better for students to take a gap year to work or travel before entering their universities. I completely agree with this statement.
To begin with, when students spend one year working or travelling, they can gain valuable experiences and broaden their horizons, which can help them to identify their career path before studying at university. For example, a good friend of mine told me that 4 years ago, after graduating from his high school, he took a one-year break, travelling throughout Vietnam. According to him, during the trip, he travelled to many interesting destinations, made new friends and also learned about the history of regions that he visited. All of which really motivated him to become a tour guide. Therefore, after finishing his long trip, he decided to study in an Academy of Tourism and Hospitality, in which, he would be trained as a professional tour guide.
Furthermore, taking a gap year before going to university can enable students to acquire educational experiences and life skills, which can greatly support their studies at university. For instance, before studying at their university in the US, some talented students, apply for seasonal jobs at some top companies such as Microsoft, Google and Facebook. Working temporarily in these companies allows them to learn soft skills such as communication skills, problem-solving skills, and planning skills. They also have a grasp of activities in some departments they are working for such as the business department, management department and human resources department. When they begin studying at university, they can easily understand related-fields subjects and also apply their soft skills to school activities. As such, they would gain academic excellence in their universities without making many efforts.
To sum up, I believe that spending at least one-year working or travelling could benefit students, graduating from high school, before going to study at university. Many of them can determine clearly which jobs they would like to do, owing to meaningful experience and perspectives acquired from trips. Meanwhile, other students can be able to equip themselves with various life-skills and necessary knowledge from their seasonal jobs, which in turn, will substantially benefit them in their study afterwards.
After finishing their study at high school, it would be better for them students to take a gap year to work or travel before entering their university. I completely agree with this statement.
To begin with, when students young people (If someone finished high school, and are not in a university, they are not a student, are they?) spend one year working or travelling, they can gain valuable experiences and broaden their horizons, which can help them to identify their career path before studying at university. For example, a good friend of mine told me that 4 years ago, after graduating from his high school, he took a one-year break, travelling throughout Vietnam. According to him, during the trip, he travelled to many interesting destinations, made new friends and also learned about the history of the regions that he visited, all of which really motivated him to become a tour guide. Therefore, after finishing his long trip, he decided to study in an Academy of Tourism and Hospitality, in which, he would be trained as a professional tour guide.
Furthermore, taking a gap year before going to university can enable them students to acquire educational experiences and life skills, which can greatly support their studies at university. For instance, before studying beginning their studies at their university in the US, some talented students, (no comma) apply for seasonal temporary jobs at some top companies such as Microsoft, Google and Facebook. Working temporarily in these companies allows them to learn soft skills such as communication skills, problem-solving skills, and planning skills. They also get exposed to the have a grasp of activities in some departments they are working for such as the business planning department, management department (There is no "management department". Managers are scattered throughout the entire organization.) and human resources department. When they begin studying at university, they can easily understand related-fields how the theory they are taught in courses is actually put into practice. subjects and also apply their soft skills to school activities. As such, they would gain high marks academic excellence in their universities without making much effort. many efforts.
To sum up, I believe that spending at least one-year working or travelling could benefit young people after students, graduating from high school, before going to study at university. Many of them can determine clearly which jobs they would like to do, owing to meaningful experience and perspectives acquired from trips or working. Meanwhile, other students can be able to they can equip themselves with various life-skills and necessary knowledge from their entry-level seasonal jobs, which in turn, will substantially benefit them in their study afterwards.
Thanks for your great feedback, teacher.
Well, about the term "students" that I used in the essay, I just copied it from the topic without noticing the meaning of it. Thanks for your explanation, I will be more careful next time.
I also make some "comma" mistakes. Honestly, I have made them a couple of times 
(. Maybe, I shallproofread my essay more.
Last but not least, I still find it difficult to write well-structured sentences, which can sound more natural. So, I should practice more.
I know there are some mistakes as well. This really motivates me to write a better essay in the near future.
That's all I want to say. Have a great weekend, teacher ^^
Lan LeWell, about the term "students" that I used in the essay, I just copied it from the topic without noticing the meaning of it.
I have noticed that these topics are not written by native English speakers, so they have silly inadvertent mistakes. Especially some Task 1 practice essays are written by people who failed all their math classes. Watch out for these faulty practice tests!
Lan LeMaybe, I shall proofread my essay more.
It is important to practice your timing to write the essay. Your time is limited, and you must leave some time to proofread and correct all the silly mistakes.
Do not write lengthy essays; aim for 170-190 words (Task 1) and 270-290 words for Task 2. Then you will have time to proofread.
Lan LeThis really motivates me to write a better essay in the near future.
We have a saying: Practice makes perfect.
The more you practice, the more you learn. The more you learn, the better your work.
I cannot agree with the opinion that there is universal advice for all applicants. But I also agree that it's good to try traveling before going to university. When I read various essays on climate change, I found fascinating facts about how students traveled to different continents and collected information for scientific journals. At [commercial web site link deleted by moderator. You can put such information in your profile, not in posts.] I found student data they were collecting even in Antarctica! In my opinion, this is the most interesting experience they could have, and they have not even started their careers and they still study for many years until they receive a degree!