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In many places, students must arrive very early in the morning to attend school. Some people believe that starting the school day early is the best approach to support learning, but others believe that starting the school day at a later time in the morning would be better for students. Which view do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In various schools, students have to get up early in the morning to go to classes. While some people suppose that this approach could be instrumental to their learning, others believe that they should arrive at school later in the morning. I agree with the latter since this would be advantageous to their health and also allow them to be well-prepared for their study, improving their study at school.
To begin with, giving more extra time for students in the morning can be beneficial for their study in terms of maintaining good health. For example, at this age, many students stay up late to do some activities such as playing games, doing homework and chatting with friends on social media. As a result, they are more likely to be sleepy and distracted in their morning classes. Not to mention that, in order to arrive at school early, some students living far from schools normally skip their breakfast. This would make them feel stomachache, and so they cannot concentrate on their study at school. However, if students are allowed to arrive at their school later in the morning, they would have more time to sleep and also to eat breakfast, which would improve their productivity in class.
Furthermore, when students have more time to prepare before going to class in the morning, they would perform well in the class. For instance, when school starts at a later time in the morning, some students can stay at their home or go to the café with friends early in the morning to review old lessons and prepare for the next lessons. As such, they will learn the subjects better in the class and also receive good scores for preparing their lessons carefully.
To sum up, I believe that starting school later in the morning would benefit students in their learning. For some students, they can have sufficient sleep the day before and have a full breakfast, which, in turn, would help them to have enough health to study. Also, other students can spend time preparing for their lessons and reviewing the old ones before going to classes, enabling them to study better in class.

In various most schools, students have to get up early in the morning to go to classes. While some people suppose that this approach could be instrumental to their learning, others believe that classes should start they should arrive at school later in the morning. I agree with them the latter since this would be advantageous to their the students' health and also allow them to be well-prepared for their study, improving their academic performance study at school.
To begin with, giving more extra time Either "more" or "extra" but not both) for students in the morning can be beneficial for their study in terms of maintaining good health. For example, at this age, many students stay up late to do some activities such as playing games, doing homework and chatting with friends on social media. As a result, they are more likely to be sleepy and inattentive distracted in their morning classes. Not to mention that, in order to arrive at school on time early, some students living far from schools normally skip their breakfast. This would make them feel weak and lethargic stomachache, and so they cannot concentrate in class. on their study at school. However, if the earliest classes are in mid-morning, students are allowed to arrive at their school later in the morning, they would have more time to sleep and also to eat breakfast, which would improve their productivity in class.
Furthermore, when students have more time to prepare before going to class in the morning, they would perform well in the class. For instance, when school starts at a later time in the morning, some students (repetitive.) they can stay at their home or go to a the café with friends early in the morning to review old lessons and prepare for the next lessons. As such, they will learn the subjects better in the class and also receive good scores for preparing their lessons carefully.


To sum up, I believe that starting school later in the morning would benefit students in their learning. For some students, they can get have sufficient sleep the night day before and have a full breakfast, which, in turn, would help them to have enough energy health to study. Also, other students can spend time preparing for their lessons and reviewing the old ones before going to classes, enabling them to study better in class.

Your essay would be better if you explained if these were high schools or universities. Be more specific.

Example:

Some high school districts schedule the starting time for classes at 7:30 am, arguing that early hours are the optimum time for learning. But many people object, saying it is better for the students to begin later, at 9 am. And I agree with them on the grounds that students will be less stressed, more relaxed and better prepared, leading to better academic performance.

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In this essay, I should have paid careful attention to the topic so that I can address it fully. Also, I need to employ a more advanced vocabulary.

Writing is tough but I will try my best.

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It is the most difficult part of the test.... practice a lot and it will get easier. You will be able to brainstorm the topics if you practice more.