Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.


Some people argued that zoos are not ethically justified in maintaining animals, and they should be closed down, whilst others disagree and think zoos offer a secure and peaceful setting for wild animals. This essay agrees that it is not morally acceptable to keep wild animals in captivity.


To begin with, people opposed to zoos highlight that being kept in captivity makes animals suffer both mentally and physically. Granted, even the best-managed zoos fail to address a captive animal’s basic need for freedom. It is clear that wild animals that are moved from their natural habitat to zoos, often feel caged and display behavioural problems. Thus, they would hurt people near them randomly. Furthermore, captive animals would establish an inactive pattern of behaviours as they do not need to hunt or raise offspring, making their body weaker and slower and consequent leading to various health risks.


Conversely, zoo enthusiasts feel that zoos safeguard endangered species and thus preserving the global system. Due to activities such as illegal poaching and wildlife trade combined with such threats as habitat loss and food chain disruption. A large number of animals are on the verge of extinction. Hence, they think that when living in zoos, wild animals are at least safe and able to breed successfully. However, evidence showed that many captive animals have been inhumanely abused and tortured. In 2009, there was an elephant escaped from a zoo in New Delhi because of being tortured.


In conclusion, although many believe zoos ensure animals' welfare, I believe these places is a complete violation of animals’ right to live as nature intended and being kept in zoos makes animals suffer from both mental and physical problems.

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Some people argued (wrong tense) that zoos are not ethically justified in maintaining animals, and they should be closed down, whilst others disagree and think zoos offer a secure and peaceful setting for wild animals. This essay (wrong!!!) agrees that it is not morally acceptable to keep wild animals in captivity.

To begin with, people opposed to zoos highlight that being kept in captivity makes animals suffer both mentally and physically. Granted, Even the best-managed zoos fail to address a captive animal’s basic need for freedom. It is clear that Wild animals that are moved from their natural habitat to zoos, (no comma) often feel caged and display behavioural problems. Thus, they would hurt people near them whenever they have the opportunity. randomly. Furthermore, captive animals would be inactive establish an inactive pattern of behaviours as they do not need to hunt or raise offspring. This makes their body weaker and slower and consequently leading to various health problems. risks.

Conversely, zoo enthusiasts feel that zoos safeguard endangered species and thus preserving their habitat's global ecosystem. Due to activities such as illegal poaching and wildlife trade combined with such threats as habitat loss and food chain disruption. Fragment, incomplete sentence) A large number of animals are on the verge of extinction. Hence, they (The animals think this?) think that when living in zoos, wild animals are at least safe and able to breed successfully. However, evidence showed that many captive animals have been inhumanely abused and tortured. In 2009, there was an elephant escaped (ungrammatical clause structure) from a zoo in New Delhi because of being tortured.

In conclusion, although many believe zoos ensure animals' welfare, I believe these places is (wrong form) a complete violation of animals’ right to live as nature intended and being kept in zoos makes animals suffer from both mental and physical problems.