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Question: An increasing trend nowadays is for young adults to play computer games. Some people say this is a negative development. Discuss and give your opinion.

Answer:

Nowadays, the Internet has increasingly developed. Therefore, the young adults has approached to play computer games. A number of people that this is a negative development. But in my opinion, positive or negative development all depend on who play computer games.

First, we can't deny the role of the Internet in today's life. We use the Internet for work, entertainment, etc ... And one of the forms of relax of today's teenager is play computer games on the Internet. If they play just to relax and entertainment, no problem. But if they are addicted to play computer games then that is worrisome. They'll kill time all day on a computer. Their eyes will suffer from myopia. In addition, if they play the violent games, they'll be infected with such action in games and maybe cause harm for the family and social. It is a disturbing thing!!!

In conclusion, we must know how to use the Internet effectively, especially the young adults. Should only play computer games about an hour per day and play healthy games, age appropriate. That is how to use the Internet actively and properly.

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Question: An increasing trend nowadays is for young adults to play computer games. Some people say this is a negative development. Discuss and give your opinion.

Answer:

Nowadays, the Internet has increasingly developed. (It is not natural English to use the present perfect tense for an activity that continues into the future. Has the Internet stopped in its development?) Therefore, the young adults has (Subject-verb agreement error.) approached (improper usage. Wrong word) to play computer games. A number of people (missing word) that this is a negative development. But in my opinion, (missing idea, missing words) positive or negative development all depend on who play (Subject-verb agreement error.) computer games. (Your thesis statement needs to be improved. It is not a good sentence.)

First, (You have written "first" without a "second" or "third." Do not use one word in a numbered sequence without the following number or numbers.) we can't deny the role of the Internet in today's life. We use the Internet for work, entertainment, etc ... (It is not proper to use "etc." or "and so on" or an ellipsis in a formal essay. This means the idea is incomplete. Good essay writers have complete ideas.) And one of the forms of relax (incorrect form) of (wrong preposition) today's teenager is (missing word) play computer games on the Internet. If they play just to relax and (missing word) entertainment, no problem. But if they are addicted to play (incorrect form) computer games then that is worrisome. They'll (Contractions are discouraged in formal essays. Use full words.) kill time all day on a computer. Their eyes will suffer from myopia. In addition, if they play the violent games, they'll be infected with (wrong word) such action in games and maybe cause harm for the family and social. (Social is an adjective, not a noun.) It is a disturbing thing!!!

In conclusion, we must know how to use the Internet effectively, especially the young adults. ("We" is first person. "Young adults" is third person. They do not go together in a sentence. ) Should only play (Missing subject for the verb "should play.") computer games about an hour per day and play healthy games, age appropriate. That is how to use the Internet actively and properly.

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Nowadays, the use of the Internet is widespread, and nearly everyone has access to it. has increasingly developed. Therefore, the Also, an increasing number of young adults has approached to play are spending significant periods of time playing computer games. A number of people think that this is a negative development but, in my opinion, whether it is a positive or negative phenomenon development (all) depends on who how an individual plays such computer games.

First, we can't deny the role of the Internet in today's life. We use the Internet for work, entertainment, online shopping and for communicating with each other. And one of the forms of relax of today's teenager is playing computer games on the Internet is one way for teenagers and young adults to relax. If they play just to relax and for casual entertainment, then there is no problem. But if they are addicted to playing computer games, then that is worrisome. They'll kill time all day on a computer. Their eyes will suffer from myopia. In addition, if they play the violent games, they'll be infected with influenced by such action in games, and maybe that may cause harm for their family and social life. It is a disturbing thing!

In conclusion, young adults must know how to use the Internet appropriately. effectively, especially the young adults. They should only play computer games for about an hour per day and play non-violent games that stimulate healthy mental activity. healthy games, age appropriate. That is how to use the Internet actively and properly.

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