Well, It's so hard for me to choose a person i love and admire in my family because i love and admire them all equally. But if i have to choose one, i would have to be my mother. She is 40 years old, but she look so young more than her age. My mother is an important person with me, she always besides me to protect me form bullies. Everyone comment her to be best mother. You know, my mom is very hard working person. She gets up pretty early at about 5:30 am every morning. She often has quick breakfast and prepares everything for me and my younger sisster to go to school. My mother is a homemaker for whole family, she love cooking, she can cook everthing. It's so delicious, specially dishes i like. Beside, her reponsibility is make a household chores, keeping the house always tidy.
She often devoted a lot of time and energy to upbring of sister and me. Despite working hard, she always make time to teach us many useful things which are necessary and important things in our later life. Moreover she a good role mode for me to follow. She always tries to get on with everyone who live next door and hep; everyone when thay are difficulties. She will gives me some predicious advices to hepl me solve those problem. She has a major influence on me and i hope that i will inherat some of her traits.

The highlighted words have errors. There are more mistakes that I have not marked.

Especially, "i" is the 9th letter of the alphabet. It does not refer to a person. Letters do not have feelings. They do not love. They do not hope.

It is very very bad English to use "i" in formal writing when you refer to yourself.

Please fix these mistakes and post your revision. Then we can work on the other mistakes.



Well, It's so hard for me to choose a person i love and admire in my family because i love and admire them all equally. But if i have to choose one, i would have to be my mother. She is 40 years old, but she look so young more than her age. My mother is an important person with me, she always besides me to protect me form bullies. Everyone comment her to be best mother. You know, my mom is very a hard working person. She gets up pretty early at about 5:30 am every morning. She often has a quick breakfast and prepares everything for me and my younger sisster to go to school. My mother is a homemaker for whole family, she love cooking, she can cook everthing. It's so delicious, specially dishes i like. Beside, her reponsibility is make a household chores, keeping the house always tidy.
She often devoted a lot of time and energy to upbring of sister and me. Despite working hard, she always make time to teach us many useful things which are necessary and important things in our later life. Moreover she a good role mode for me to follow. She always tries to get on with everyone who live next door and hep; everyone when thay are difficulties. She will gives me some predicious advices to hepl me solve those problem. She has a major influence on me and i hope that i will inherat some of her traits.