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Could you please help me with this task 1 ielts, i guess i made a lot of mistake here. Thank you in advance!

The table shows the data about the percentage of household income per a month that five nations in Europe spend on five different categories of expenditures namely food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

Overall, consumers in five countries spend their budget on food and drink and housing more than that on clothing and entertainment.

The percentages of expenditures that French, German and British spend on housing are always higher than those on food and drink. The figures for housing in France , Germany and UK are 31%, 33%, 37%, respectively, while those figures for food and drink are just 25%, 22% and 27%, respectively. In contrast, the proportions of income that people in Turkey spend on housing is less than those on food and drink, at 20% and 36%, respectively. Likewise, Spanish spend 18% of their budget on housing, compared to 31% on food and drink.

People in five countries spend less money on clothing and entertainment. People spend only 15% of their income on clothing and less than 15% for the remaining expenditures. Likewise, the percentage of income allocated for entertainment just range from 10% to 19%.

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The table shows the data about the percentage of household income per a month that five nations (It's the people, not the nations. Nations spend on items like infrastructure, schools, hospitals, national defense and health care.) in Europe spend on five different categories of expenditures namely food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. (Incomplete. What are the nations?)


Overall, consumers (not a good synonym) in these five countries (You have not told the reader which countries are listed.) spend more of their budget on food and drink and housing more than that on clothing and entertainment. (You need one more main observation. The second paragraph should have two or three of the most obvious points. )

The percentages of expenditures that French, German and British spend on housing are always higher than those on food and drink. The figures for housing in France , Germany and UK are 31%, 33%, 37%, respectively, while those figures for food and drink are just 25%, 22% and 27%, respectively. (That is very repetitive and poorly formed sentence. Use a pronoun to refer to "percentages".

In the housing category, they are 31%, 33%, and 37% in France, Germany and the UK, respectively; and 25%, 22% and 27% for food and drink.)


In contrast, the proportions of income that people in Turkey spend on housing is less than those on food and drink, at 20% and 36%, respectively. Likewise, the Spanish spend 18% of their budget on housing, compared to 31% on food and drink.

People in these five countries spend less money on clothing and entertainment. People spend only 15% of their income on clothing and less than 15% for the remaining expenditures. Likewise, the percentage of income allocated for entertainment just range (wrong form. subject/verb mismatch) from 10% to 19%.


Model essay:

The table shows the percentage of monthly income expended on each of four budget categories (food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment ) for families in five European countries (France, Germany, the UK, Turkey and Spain).

In the "overall" paragraph, give 2 or 3 most important observations:

Overall, the highest percentages are allocated to meals and accommodation, with much less going to clothing and entertainment. Housing is relatively more costly in France, Germany and the UK in comparison with Turkey and Spain. The French and Spanish devote relatively modest proportions of their income to clothing (7-8%).

In the next paragraph, record some interesting details.

Meals take from a little under a quarter to a bit over a third of monthly income, with the Turks having the highest outlays, at 36%, in contrast with the Germans, who spend only 22%. Housing averages over 30% in France, Germany and the UK, (31%, 33% and 37%, respectively), in contrast to Turkey (20%) and Spain (18%). Proportions allocated to entertainment range from 10% to 19%, with the Turks having the smallest and Germans the largest.

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Trang TrầnCould you please help me with this task 1 ielts, i guess i made a lot of mistake here.

Could you please help me with this task 1 ielts, (IELTS must be capitalized because it is an acrynym. You have a comma splice error)

i guess i made a lot of mistake here. (There are three errors here. Can you recognize them?)

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such a detailed correction. Thank you, AlpheccaStars