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It is the first time I have written Ietls writing task1. It would be grateful if you could check my mistakes. Thank you so much

The line graph compares the amount of electricity generated in France using 4 differrent sources of power over the period of 30 years from 1980.

Overall, electricity production from nuclear and renewable energy saw upward trends during the period shown. The opposite trend was true for the other kinds of fuel.

In 1980, nuclear power provided roughly 50 Twh while the figure for renewables was negligible. Over the next 30 years, electricity generation through nuclear energy rised dramatically to a peak of 430Twh in 2005 and then slightly declined to approximately 410 Twh in 2010. Seeing the same trend, the amount of electricity from renewable energy remained stable before moderately increase to 20 Twh in 2010.

Providing 110Twh in 1980, thermal power was by far the most importance means of electricity production in France whereas hydroelectricity power counted as the second main source with 80Twh of power. The figure for thermal electricity generation fell significantly to 50Twh in 1985 and remained at this level for the rest of the period. Hydroelectricity-generated electricity remained relatively steady at between 50 and 80 for the whole 30-year period.

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The line graph compares the amount of electricity generated in France using 4 differrent sources of power (what sources?) over the period of 30 years from 1980.

Overall, electricity production from nuclear and renewable energy saw upward trends during the period shown. The opposite trend was true for the other kinds of fuel. (Not quite right. There was no significant trend for hydroelectric power.)

In 1980, nuclear power provided roughly 50 Twh while the amount produced by figure for renewables was negligible. Over the next 30 years, electricity generation through nuclear energy rised (wrong form) dramatically to a peak of 430Twh in 2005 and then slightly declined (wrong word order) to approximately 410 Twh in 2010. Seeing Following the same trend, (Incorrect. The two do not have the same trend. There was no trend for renewable energy production until 2005, but there was an upward trend in the last five years, opposite to that of nuclear energy.) the amount of electricity from renewable energy remained stable unchanged before moderately increase (wrong form) to 20 Twh in 2010.

Providing 110Twh in 1980, thermal power was by far the most importance (wrong form) means of electricity production in France whereas hydroelectricity power counted as the second main source with 80Twh of power. The figure for amount from thermal sources electricity generation fell significantly to 50Twh in 1985 and remained at this level for the rest of the period. Hydroelectricity-generated Hydroelectric electricity remained relatively steady at between 50 and 80 for the whole 30-year period.


(You missed the most important point of this graph. In 1980 the total amount of electricity used in France was a little over 200 Terawatt hours (TW-h). In the next decade, the demand for electricity nearly doubled and continued to increase, reaching a peak in 2005 at about 550 TW-h. Most of the development to meet this demand was provided by ...)